Overall, I enjoyed it, but there were some problems here with elements overpowering the main melody.
At 1:20 until 1:27, I feel that the sounds used made the song a bit disconnected, and needed a smoother transition into 1:29. Another time this happens is at 1:42-44, the loudest reaches its peak and is kinda too high for me. Maybe just my ears but just a lower pitch there would make a smoother transition.
Overall, good job for a first major song!
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