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Ah, yes, Saturday evening.
Before 6pm, since that's when we're all suppose to 'die' according to the x year old priest. : )
I'll do them then, since I've been fairly busy through most of my school week!
Sweeeet :D.
Also:
But, before *my fear-stricken eyes could afford a blink
Thanks, DX. I'll edit it when my internet isn't so slow!
Anything else you'd like to point out?
OK, you asked for it.
I find it weird that at the end of 'only a knife at hand' you add three dots with a space between each one and then in the next line the dots don't have a space between them. Also I believe there should be a space between the last dot of the three dots and the 'it' of 'it didn't stop', so like "The blood...it didn't stop..." should be "The blood... it didn't stop...". That however is personal preference.
Yes I am a nitpicker and yes I enjoy doing it :D.
But to be honest other than tiny stuff like that it's great. You've got a nice style of writing for this genre, and like in Love No More you've managed to convey emotion in your writing superbly.
Ah, thank you very much for your input. Once my computer stops being a meanie, I'll do a few edits!
^_^ My latest writing is more of a modern literature as some people say, and it involves more of the Black culture.
I don't want to tell you how many times I have rewrote a story. It's called Dream and has about five different versions all with different endings.
It's in my other post, and I am quite amazed that I wrote it. I don't usually write that style since it's not one of my favorites.
Step
The days of human life *have* been usurped by the vampire race.
Just sayin' :3.
Although very nice story, don't think I've heard one like it before but then again I don't watch many vampire movies or read any vampire books so I'm not sure.
Right now it looks a lot like a news report though. Was that intentional?
YumeSin
Yes, very intentional.
Most of the beginning story will be told by the news/reporters.
& thanks for the grammar fix-up, last night my eyes weren't doing too well because of allergies.
I barely got the plot done in time before I couldn't take it anymore.
Excerpt should be done in a jiffy =D